Matt - Sorry, I didn't mean to offend you. I spent over 30 years as a professional writer/editor. I have an honors BA in English from Yale University. Please understand, I am trying to help you out. This isn't a matter of opinion or taste. It's as if you have text extending outside of boxes and broken links. You apparently don't even understand basic principles, such as what constitutes a change of voice/person and why it is bad.

I do think you are probably a good businessman and that you can understand this piece of advice: You need to hire someone to write your copy. There are a number of unemployed Ph.D.'s in the humanities who are both inexpensive and good. Try Craigslist or a local services directory.